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Topic: some parents buy their children a large number of toys to play\ with. What are the advantages and disadvantages for the children of having a large number of toys?

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Even if parents wish to purchase a bunch of toys for their own children, once they had toddlers they do buy some which
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 them satisfied with what they bought. we will discuss the uses and problems that come with it, and analyse it deeply so that we can distinguish it.
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 with, Infants like to play all the time in fact they even can play without any tools.
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; how many times have you watched a movie where a months old play himself and laughs himself, likely
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 gives an edge of having a number of dolls so that they can't miss out on fun while playing
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, they throw around some things which got lost or broken eventually
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; how many chess players came for new boards just because they lost one piece same manner losing them due to that we will purchase new ones again and again. on top of it though, repeated use can wear off quickly or they will be bored of using it that can cost us more due to we have to make sure they use all of them regularly A great example is; all petrolheads have a common job which was even if they are busy they have to check every vehicle regularly. that gives additional work to parents and jobs for younger ones. most of all due to continuous play they get bored of playing itself that can leave us with a large number of waste toys which we can't use since we are adults Perfect example is; we people like to eat what we crave for but professional who eats a lump some are action pass the threshold of sense and enjoyment of living the movie. the same will happen to them that can cost us a fortune to bring back that passion. that concludes my analysis about how having a number of toys can be a good and bad thing at a time, where one uses it is energetic and relaxing in another form that cost a lot of work and manpower to maintain them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enhanced creativity
  • motor skill development
  • educational benefits
  • social skills
  • overstimulation
  • cognitive abilities
  • fine motor skills
  • gross motor skills
  • sharing and cooperation
  • shorter attention spans
  • lack of value
  • gratitude and appreciation
  • environmental impact
  • non-recyclable materials
  • materialistic values
  • sense of entitlement
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