Recent advances in medicine have resulted in an increase in life expectancy over the past four years. Do you think that the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

since medical treatments have progressed, many people expect to live longer than before.

Although

there may be some positive consequences of

this

trend, I believe it is more harmful.

Due to

advances in medicine, more diseases are curable today, which allows us to spend more time with our families, and have our parents around as it is significant for a child.

For example

, many children in the past may have lost their parents to disease outbreaks, and they would have been left alone to survive.

in addition

, we can

also

follow our dreams for a

while

longer, achieve more accomplishments, and enjoy our time by travelling around the world and

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trying new hobbies as well.

However

, a rise in life expectancy rates has some negative impacts on society. the main issue is that, as the population gets older, more people of retirement age will obviously be eligible to receive a pension, and governments would

therefore

receive less money in taxes.

In other words

, young working adults should take more responsibility for tax payments.

Moreover

, young adults would be under pressure

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care of their elderly relatives and pay for their needs as well. these responsibilities make them

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busy that they do not tend to have their own spouse and children.

For instance

, in Iran, as the proportion of working people is becoming smaller, the birth rate is decreasing. In conclusion, developments related to medicines have resulted in higher life expectancy.

While

it has positive effects on individuals, I believe that the disadvantages outweigh the benefits.