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Some people believe that car-free days are effective ways to reduce air pollution. However, others argue that there are other ways that are more effective. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that living without a car can decrease
air
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pollution
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 effectively, while some may state that there are different methods that can reach the goal of reducing
air
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pollution
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 in a more effective way. In my opinion, it is more helpful to fix on others means rather than
car-free
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 days in order to improve the
air
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 condition.
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 and foremost, I believe that the
pollution
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 made by industries
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 most of the proportion of
air
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pollution
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. The factories' emissions somehow rapid the speed of the greenhouse effect, eventually decreasing the
air
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 condition. 
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, the quantity of factory emissions is far more than the exhaust gas emitted by automobiles. With a view to creating better
air
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quality
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, it is crucially important for the government to launch the emission regulation. A good case in point is that Taichung, which is known as the biggest national industrial park, has been reported as the city with the most worse
air
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pollution
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 in our country. Compared with other cities in Taiwan, Taichung shows worse
air
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quality
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 every year due to the rapid increasing factories development.
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, the local government started to launch the regulation on factories emission, which somehow directly slowed down the speed of
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pollution
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, improving the living
quality
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.
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, some may endorse that a
car-free
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day
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 is a more helpful and effective way to improve the
air
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quality
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 by simply changing their daily transportation habit.
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, there are many countries setting a
car-free
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day
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 with the aim of increasing public awareness of the greenhouse effect. Private automobiles are banned on that
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, which forced people to choose to take public transportation or walk.
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 kind of campaign not only decreased the exhaust gas generated by automobiles but
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 appealing people to take more public transportation rather than
private
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 automobile. In conclusion, I am convinced that there are other methods
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 of
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car-free
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a car-free
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day
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days
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 that can solve
air
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pollution
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 more effectively.
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 is because of the fact that regulating industrial
emission
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emissions
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, which is the main factor of
air
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pollution
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, can decrease
air
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pollution
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 more directly and effectively.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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