The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.

The maps below show an industrial area in the town of Norbiton and planned future development of the site.
The map
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how the Norbiton industrial
area
look
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at
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now and in the future. In
term
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of the industrial
area
now, there are eight factories in the east of the town. Three of them are allocated in the west of the roundabout.
Other
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five
facories
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factories
are along the shorter stree. One of them is
at the end
of the
stree
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street
. All of them are in the south of
river
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the river
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. With regard to Norbiton industrial
area
after future development, all of the factories will be replaced by houses. There will be a small roundabout
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in the
southest
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southeast
stree. Two roads will be
builded
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. One of them
cross
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the river. The other one will be located
in
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the
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northwest of the biggest roundabout. There will have more facilities in Norbiton industrial
area
,
such
as shops, Medical
center
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. They are around the
biggst
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biggest
roundabout. There will build a school in the
eastest
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easiest
east
of the town.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • industrial area
  • development
  • infrastructure
  • manufacturing
  • facilities
  • transition
  • planning
  • commercial
  • residential
  • renovation
  • urban planning
  • sustainability
  • environmental impact
  • local economy
  • rejuvenation
  • construction
  • modernization
  • accessibility
  • demolition
  • gentrification
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