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The best way to make the road transport of goods safer is to ask drivers to take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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People have different views about the question of how to make our roads safer.
While
 I agree with the idea that an annual driving test is necessary, I believe that
government
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 can take other measures to boost
road
safety
.
To begin
, it is important to ask
drivers
 to take driving tests every year as long as they do not cause
road
 accidents. It is
also
 essential to educate people way before they start driving and that can be done in schools or other extended driving
safety
 programs.
For example
, television campaigns are used to show effective ways to be more careful
while
 driving.
moreover
, local traffic controls can help
drivers
to
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pay more attention
while
 driving by adding signs on roads, speed bumps, and
road
 bends.
However
, I believe that
government
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 and local councils should consider strict punishments for careless and dangerous
drivers
 who increase
road
 accidents. There are various penalties for driving offences
such
 as fines or even prison sentences. These punishments would encourage them to drive more safely and be responsible for others’ lives and
safety
.
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 addition, speed cameras can help the police to identify lawbreaker
drivers
 to punish them.
Furthermore
, the government should ban those who have alcohol drinking problems and tend to drive when they are drunk and risk other people's lives, and not let them get a driving license one more time in their lifetime.
To conclude
,
while
 I agree that a yearly driving test is an important measure to tackle
road
safety
 issues, I believe that strict punishments are
also
 necessary.
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task response
Ensure that your arguments directly respond to the question prompt. Address the specific points raised and develop a clear position. Use relevant examples and evidence to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your essay has a clear overall structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Use cohesive devices to link ideas within and between paragraphs.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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