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some languages spoken by very few people are losing their importance and may become extinct completely.it is a good or bad development? what are the reasons for this

#languages #people #importance #development
Nowadays there are some
languages
 that are vanishing because of variable reasons.
Although
 I think
this
 is not a nice development, it is some kind of a natural process. In
this
 essay, a few causes of
this
 issue will be addressed before reaching a conclusion.
Firstly
, many
languages
 have their own way of conveying human things.
For instance
, there are numerous phrases and idioms that have special meanings and can transfer the idea better than common and usual conversations.
Therefore
,
language
 extinction
as a result
 of an
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 loss sounds bad apparently.
Secondly
, each
language
 comes from a culture that has been developing since its creation. So by becoming extinct, there will be no signs of the culture available. The main reason for an
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 loss may be a decreasing number of people who speak that
language
.
Moreover
, the level of difficulty of that
language
 is not as
less
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effective as we think.
Additionally
,
languages
also
 fade away because the official spoken
language
 is a different one so schools and books use another
language
. So
that
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language
 enters society and becomes more important than
the
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spoken
language
.
For example
, the spoken
languages
 in the centre of Zagros are becoming used less than before by their own people. In conclusion, the extinction process of a
language
 seems normal in case of any effort may be put on to save the
language
. Personally, I think it is a bad development and there may be nothing to stop it.
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