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Some think that university students shouldn't be allowed to study whatever subject that they want and should only focus on those that will contribute to a better future, but others oppose that.

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believe that young
people
 must be encouraged to
study
subjects
 that will be useful in the
future
. To start with, making young
people
study
subjects
 like technology and science would ensure constant technological advancements in the
future
. During the
last
 decade progress in science has slowed down significantly. Having more
people
 working in that area could provide the human race with a brighter
future
. The
second
 benefit is, that studying
subjects
 that are beneficial for the
future
 would decrease unemployment rates. If
people
 were divided on what they do best and encouraged to
study
 those
subjects
 there wouldn't be too many or too few workers in specific areas. Making university students
study
subjects
 that are useful for the
future
 can ensure workplaces for everyone and stable scientific and technological advancement.
However
, letting university students choose
subjects
 that they want to
study
 would benefit overall public satisfaction. Allowing a choice can not only help with the happiness of
people
 but can
also
 help discover potential talents. Satisfied
people
 will be better at their job and more motivated to work. Having considered both perspectives giving university students a choice about their
future
 would increase the amount of satisfied, motivated workers. Making choices for
people
 would provide a safer and more advanced
future
 by ensuring workplaces and constant technological advancements.
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