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I am writing to express my interest in studying for the Master of Engineering Program "
Electrical
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In Electrical
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 and Computer Engineering" at
University
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the University
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 of Saskatchewan. My choice of studying
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 course is to strengthen my
knowledge
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 and improve my skills in Power systems, and Communication Technologies. I am currently working as a Mechatronics Engineer, having a total of 6 years of experience, out of which 2.5 years in the industrial sector, and am currently looking forward to moving on to the
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 stage of my career. Having good
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 of electronics, electrical and mechanical design, I was able to achieve any given task with innovative ideas, which resulted in better performance.
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, I am still eager to learn more and advance in my career.
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, I am looking forward to improving my
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 of future technologies like EV and Hybrid technologies, which will play a major role in any stream. That’s one of the reasons I chose to study the "Electrical and Computer Engineering" program, which covers the courses I needed the most. So grant me
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 opportunity to study at
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 of Saskatchewan and to gain
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 about the program I prefer. Meanwhile, I took a virtual tour on the college website. The various majors in the research field and the supervisors gave me a very positive impression that I can be independent to choose the stream and do a project that suits my interest. All of the required documents are submitted along with
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 letter, and I am excited about my college education to commit to and achieve academic excellence. Thank you so much for your time and consideration. I eagerly anticipate receiving an acceptance letter from the University of Saskatchewan. If you have any questions for me or if I can be of assistance in any way, please let me know.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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