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In some countries, people follow the latest fashion and hairstyles. In your opinion, what is influencing this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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At a certain point, nowadays most countries follow the latest
fashion
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 design and hairstyle
trends
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. In my point of view, I disagree with the given statement. Because those
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 mostly impact
people
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 negatively. Those will change one’s personality instantly. Let’s dig into what kind of influence they are giving to society, and
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 why I don’t follow
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 trend. In the beginning, I want to discuss the Influencing side of
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 topic,
Fashion
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, and Dressing intentions coming from multicultural beliefs attached to their unique decorative cultures maybe from the religions too, Another way, perhaps due to the influence of various
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, singers and their levels of beauty standards cause a huge commotion among the society.
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,
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 try to compare themselves to impeccable-looking
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, as they feel sorrow and low self-esteem.
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 as I have a friend who was always sipping over a popular actress, After the finals, She wanted to shape her body just like hers, She went into enormous pain, suffering by following strict diets and exercises. In the end, she passed away because of severe indigestion.
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, the families even suffer from violence,
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 when the wife told her husband to be like him.
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,
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 create
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trends
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 just for nothing, expecting their fans to follow them. Those clothes, and shoes, make hairdos that are above their average budget and tend to borrow from family and friends. Simply, It is a waste of money and time. Individuals should consider their income and whether they can afford those
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 items or not. To conclude, It is acceptable if those
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trends
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 sneak in through their impact on cultures and religions except the influence of
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. Even though
people
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 want to be confident and feel content. In my opinion, It is best if
people
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 recognize their unique taste in
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 rather than following
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 that can’t be affordable.
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