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It is very clear that English should be the primary foreign language taught in all schools around the world. Learning a different language before English is, in today’s world, a waste of time. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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English
 is obviously one of the most widespread languages on Earth. Despite that fact, I completely disagree with the idea, that
English
 should be seen as the only option for a primary foreign
language
.
English
 is undoubtedly important, after
all
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 it still has a leading position in science, education, and business,
nevertheless
, we should warn ourselves from a blind belief, that
English
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language
 will have maintained
this
 high status forever. Had it not been connected to the strong economic basis,
Chinese
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language
 would have never been taken seriously as a competitor to
English
.
However
, nowadays
Chinese
 is the most widely spoken
language
 in the world, and its popularity is constantly enhancing.
Therefore
, for modern
youngsters
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English
 knowledge is simply not enough.
Chinese
 may be a better variant for being the
first
 foreign accent, not only because of its frequency but
also
 thanks
to
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 its difficulty. For children from continents other than Asia learning the
Chinese
language
 might be pretty challenging. An idea of the majority of Asian languages is based on drawing sufficient images of objects with remarkable features, not signs - the letters, which are generally used like instruments with no personal meanings inside. Hard though the
Chinese
language
 seems, it is easier to absorb complex rules as necessities and habits in childhood. To summarize, to my mind, it is essential for parents to reckon
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 the future perspectives of their offspring.
Accordingly
, the economic situation in the modern world dictates us to choose between two mainly spread languages and it is easier to memorize difficult things in childhood though.
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