Some People claims that not enough of the waste from homes is recycled. They say that the only way to increase recycling is for governments to make it a legal requirement. To what extent do you think laws are needed to make people recycle ore of their waste?

Nowadays, especially in
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western
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the proportion of home disposals has become a crucial problem for governments to deal with. Some social groups have been asking their government to make recycling and reutilization of
waste
an obligation for every citizen through laws that should force
people
to recycle. It is a fact that all democratic governments must decide among two principal ways to make citizens obey: they can use
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law enforcement with the
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of fines and other legal punishments, or they can
instead
choose to apply educational policies to convince
people
to accept willingly what has to be done. I strongly think that implementing a police State, forcing
people
to recycle, is not the way to deal with the situation.
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the contrary, governments should promote educational programs about the importance of recycling and design a sort of benefits system to stimulate it. Education programs must be considered
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the best option to change social habits. In the case of recycling, it should be strengthened whit an honest social debate about consumerism. We live in a society that
push
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people
to buy things they
not
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always need and, at the same time, must face how to solve the home
waste
problems. Designing a special tax benefits system could
also
induce
people
to adopt measures to reduce
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domestic
waste
. Reducing taxes
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those buildings with a functional
waste
classification system
,
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can inspire other constructions and real estate developers to implement
this
kind of plan while designing new projects. It could
also
be attractive to create bus or
subways
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ticket dispensers that allow
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pay
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with pet bottles or
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of plastic junk. Educational programs to make
people
more conscious about a social
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and adopting public policies to benefit citizens
instead
of treating
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always be a better way to change society.
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