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Some people believe that traffic problems in cities can best be resolved by investing in urban infrastructure while others feel they are superior solutions discuss both sides and keep on opinion.

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 it is sometimes thought that investing in rural-urban infrastructure reduces
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 issues, other
people
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 believe that there is the best method. In
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 essay, I agree with the latter point because
traffic
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 congestion can be resolved by extending more business in regional
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 and expanding of opening
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 of
businesses
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 in
cities
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. On the one hand, some
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 think that other superior solutions in improving
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 problems in
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 and I agree that other best ways to reduce
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.
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,
businesses
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 should expand their branches in regional
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 it's a better way to reduce
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.
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, currently, many
people
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 are travelling to commute daily walk in the
cities
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 as most officers’ banks and manufacturing industries are located in
cities
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. once
businesses
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 start expanding their operations in regional
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 it will reduce huge
traffic
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 they are as
people
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 can find walk in the nearest subdivision and
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 will save
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 in travelling at the same
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 safe travelling expense which they can use in the other necessary expenses
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, society will have more
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 with their families which currently they spend travelling
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, expanding trade in rural
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 increase companies’ profit with government involvement to improve the regional infrastructure by government reduce transportation duty and declare tax free zones as
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 will give comfort to businessmen to expense
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 place in mind with disposal of any waste in a proper manner to avoid pollution there.
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, another way to reduce
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 is by changing business operating
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. Currently, shops in
cities
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 open at 9:00 AM and close at 5:00 PM so they should consider expanding opening
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 from 8:00 AM to 8:00 PM as
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 will general public ample
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 to visit officers in shopping and there will be no rush hour which creates more
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 currently. Some
people
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 may prefer to do shopping in the morning while in the evening while others preferred in the evening as
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 build spread the
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 all the times in
cities
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. Recent research found in Australia that shifting most
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 to remote
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 has reduced huge
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 to
cities
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 other countries had followed the same approach.
On the other hand
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, it is often believed that it is the best solution to invest in infrastructure to reduce
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 flow in
cities
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. While investment in framework will only improve the better road conditions and public transport which can reduce accidents and modify the outlook of
cities
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.
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, to building, multi-complex car parking will only allow more parking spaces but at the same
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 makes more
people
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 travel to
cities
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. in conclusion, while
people
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 may vary in their opinions, I think that shifting business in regional
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 and increasing opening
hours
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 are the best ways to overcome
traffic
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 congestions in
cities
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.

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