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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more diadvantages?

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Many
people
 work long hours leaving very little
time
 for leisure activities. Does
this
 situation have more advantages or more disadvantages Nowadays
people
 spend a lot of
time
 working. And cannot spend energy on various parties. I will discuss both aspects in
this
 essay
First
 of all the advantage of working for a long
time
 is that it allows you to bring your experience to a higher level.
In addition
, employees with more experience help to get a higher salary. Working for a long
time
 helps
people
 to achieve high-ranking results. Employees can show their superior other reports outside of working hours and surprise their superior.
For example
, when our colleagues have left to play, we are still involved in processing tasks which can be as a hardworking employee by the manager. In
this
 way when the promotion chances appear you will be the potential candidate for
this
 ,
However
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 it’s advantages
it
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also
 has disadvantages,which reduce productivity and cause
people
 to lose motivation.
Such
 an imbalanced routine can cause damage to health. Due to that fact without these humans could make unchangeable mistakes during the working process and regret them. As a
,
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consequence the employer can fire the worker and they could lose their reputation throughout their career. In a nutshell, I can say that working too much during working hours is harmful to
people
’s health. I’m a firm believer in having the right work and balance in life.
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