Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football, while other people think that taking part in individual sports, like tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

There
are
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some conflicting
view
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views
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on whether
people
should prefer
team
sport
or solo
sport
. From my observation,
although
individual
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individuals
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exert
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some great benefits, I would argue that combination
sport
deserves to
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picked
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more than its competitor. On the one hand, I partly can understand why
people
would prefer solo
sports
as
its
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benefits.
Firstly
,
people
can earn
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independence and profound specialization, for playing
the
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individual
sports
requires
player
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players
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in-depth skills in
their
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area of
their
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interest, which need a lot of effort and time to achieve.
For instance
, a chess
player
needs to show
consecutively
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high-performance mindset when playing chess without any support from anyone, so they will know how to independently conquer the competition and overthink
for
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any steps that they will do in chess.
In addition
,
the
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solo
sports
always reflect their true ability, and
thus
the winner in
this
kind of
sports
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deserves to get rewarded and critically acclaimed by
people
, with no doubt from everybody.
ON
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the other hand, in spite of some enormous merits
from
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personal
sport
, I am still of opinion that the
team
sport
is better.
To begin
with, in
the
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team
sport
,
the
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capability is not appreciated highly, whereas the sense of
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teamwork
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team work
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is the pivotal
elements
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,
thus
being friendly and integrating
playing
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the
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key point .
In particular
, there are plural persons in
this
sport
, which need a corporation and be in harmony to become the
championship
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. To illustrate, in the football
team
, if they want to operate smoothly, any
player
in
this
team
will need to understand and support each other, and I can imagine that the football
team
could easily fall down
in
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abyss if
there
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team
had not
coordination
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between
player
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players
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although
all the
player
in that
team
own
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a valuable and essential skills
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. In the end,
people
can share their success with their
partner
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and celebrate with them
in
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their happiness. In conclusion, while
sport
playing by
independent
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an independent
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individual can provide have some advantages, I believe that the
team
is more
worthy
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playing for the factor of working together and sharing joy
to
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each other.
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