Nowadays, people are not as fit and healthy as they used to be in the past which creates health issues in the long the run. What are the reasons? What can be done to solve this problem?

Health issues become one of the most
problem
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problems
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for modern society. People feel that their health more decreasing from time to time.
This
condition can be affected by
individual's
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an individual's
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modern lifestyle. We can't
controlling
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control
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external factors but we can take care of our own
healthy
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health
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. In
this
era, junk food
restaurant
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restaurants
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abundant
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and every sector gives convenience for life.
This
situation makes people
consuming
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unhealthy food
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • physical inactivity
  • processed foods
  • caloric intake
  • obesity
  • cardiovascular diseases
  • diabetes
  • health awareness
  • preventive measures
  • corporate wellness programs
  • public health initiatives
  • behavioral change
  • motivational strategies
  • dietary choices
  • exercise regimen
  • urban planning
  • mental wellbeing
  • smart technology
  • genetic factors
  • personal accountability
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