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The plans below show the layout of university's sport center now, and how it will look after redevelopment.

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The two plans illustrate locations of
sport
 now, and the modifications will take place in the future. Overall,
the
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considerable developments will
be happened
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happen
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. The
first
plan
 displays different places which are related to different
sport's
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sports
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 areas and the
second
plan
 shows the additional places which lead to expanding the whole
plan
. The
first
plan
 indicates various locations of
sport
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the sport
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center
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, including outdoor courts, pool, seating, changing room, gym, and reception. Obviously, the
second
plan
 will be extended with additional places.
Such
 as,
dance
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 studio and leisure pool will be constructed on the East and West
side
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sides
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 of the
plan
 respectively.
Additionally
,
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the sport
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sport
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sports
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 shop and café will be occurred on the sides of the entrance, beside the seating
sport
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 hall will locate. It can be seen that the noticeable extra changing rooms will be added on
the
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each south corner of the
plan
.
however
, the most significant change is
elimination
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the elimination
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 of outdoor courts.
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