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You play a team sport with some friends. Last week a member of the team had an accident and wasn't able to play with you at the weekend. You decide to write to him in hospital, telling him about the match. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, tell him which team won describe the conditions on the day say how you felt about the match

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Dear Javid, I was sorry to hear about your accident hope you are doing well and it is not boring to stay in the hospital. I would like to let you know that
although
 the opponent team was very strong,we could win.The score was 2-0.As the game started,they attacked a few times to score a goal but our defence could bear their pressure. The weather was so awful.It was changeable.
First
,we got soaked because of the heavy rain.
That is
 why we were unable to control the ball,so the pitch was very muddy.It made our performance difficult.At the end of the match strong wind launched in spite of that,we could finish and keep the score in our favour On the one hand,I was so happy about the game because despite the both strong team and bad weather we could be victorious over the rival.
On the other hand
,I was unhappy about your injury. On behalf of all of my team ,members I would like to wish to recover as soon as possible. Sincerely Malik Maliki.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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