Whether or not someone achieves their aims is mostly by a question of luck. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
It is often considered that
people
achieve their goals or not, mainly a matter of luck
or some beliefs. In my, inclination luck
do
not play a role Change the verb form
does
to gain
success. Change preposition
in gaining
Thus
I completely disagree with the statement which leads to a logical conclusion.
Analyzing the statement and explaining further
, the first and foremost reason behind is that hard-working people
are found to achieve their respective goals without any hurdles. Moreover
, they believe in
practising it would help them to attain their target in life. Change preposition
that
For instance
, college cliques of students tend to spend time in un useless activities because they have a mindset that god will help them out but when exam outcomes came
they realise what mistake they have Wrong verb form
come
done
in a course duration.
Probing ahead, Verb problem
made
Luck
has a 1% chance that the masses can reach their aims. Moving further
, it is pertinent to mention that all successful people
have a clear mindset, Meanwhile, in the,beginning they work hard so they can be a
successful Correct article usage
apply
people
. For example
, APJ Abdul Kalam sir is a clear example of a people
. Nowadays, individuals use to
follow him on each and every social site so they can Verb problem
apply
encourage
by him and follow his thoughts. Wrong verb form
be encouraged
In addition
to this
parents use to guide their adolescents to work hard, and practise more and more will help them to be a
successful Correct article usage
apply
people
.
To recapitulate, according to
the argument one reaches the conclusion luck
will not help you out in life. Furthermore
, you have to grind yourself to achieve success in life.Submitted by vermarohit981.rv on
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