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some countries young people have little leisure time and are under a lot of pressure to work hard in their studies. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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Unlike most of the developed countries, there are several nations where
students
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 free time to perform academically well;
thus
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them
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 live under constant pressure.
This
 essay will elucidate the causative factors of
this
 unfortunate phenomenon and the remedial measures that can be taken to ameliorate the fate of these youngsters.
This
 problem can be caused by
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 of reasons. The most conspicuous contributing factor is the inadequate higher educational
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opportunities
oppurtunities
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opportunities
provided by the education system which increases the competition among
students
 to obtain eligibility to enter a reputed university. Due to
this
 reason,
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young individuals may have to scarify their leisure time. Another pivotal aspect is the limited outstanding
career
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opportunities
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 available in the
country
 that matches the diversity of the skills present among
students
.
Therefore
, to avoid being unemployed in future, the
students
delligently
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diligently
 engage in education. The lower the
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 and
career
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opportunities
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opportunities
 a
country
produce
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, the more stress is placed upon the
students
.
Nevertheless
, the problem is not insurmountable and the tension
upon
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 young
students
 can be tackled with appropriate measures to enhance
educational
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the educational
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 and
career
 aspects of the
country
.
Firstly
, the higher educational
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opportunities
oppurtunitis
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opportunities
 for
students
 must be increased by expanding the
amount
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number
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 of
students
 enrolled for university in a year as well as by
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creating
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creatin
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creating
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 pathways for
vocational based
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 studies for
students
 who are interested in sharpening their
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skills.
Moreover
, bureaucrats should take measures to create numerous
varities
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varieties
 of
career
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opportunities
oppurtunities
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opportunities
 that can match the educational specializations the
students
 have attained. To exemplify, if universities offer
marine related
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courses
sources
cources
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courses
, the government must take attempts to strengthen the marine sector of the
country
 with
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occupation
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occupations
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 that these graduates can be recruited
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 graduation. In conclusion, it can be
recapitutated
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recapitulated
 that, since young people are the future generation of a
country
 placing a huge pressure upon them for academic purposes can have detrimental effects.
However
,
this
 consequence can be
tackeld
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tackled
 with long-term prophylactic ,
easures
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measures
 implemented by the government.In
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