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The death penalty is the best way to control and reduce serious crime. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people believe capital
punishment
 is extremely useful for reducing serious
crime
, while others think that it is not,
however
, both points of view are worthy of discussion. On the one hand, the death penalty is partly useful for reducing heinous crimes since it will prevent some crimes to occur. Take China
for example
, where the death penalty is still working, and the
crime
 rate is lower than in other countries without it. The fact is that people know that committing a certain heinous
crime
 will receive a determinate
punishment
, so if the latter is severe enough people will avoid it.
On the other hand
,
this
 kind of
punishment
 is not wholly effective, as when the murderer is committing a
crime
, his brain is completely overcome with emotion and cannot think about the consequences. Take a case as an example, one person knows that he can’t kill anyone since he will be charged with the death penalty, but when he is fighting with the
next
 enemy he will lose his mind and an extreme result outcome would be a heinous
crime
such
 as murder. In conclusion, it could be said that capital
punishment
 is partly effective to reduce serious crimes rate, but it is
also
 too cruel for felons since it doesn’t give them the opportunity to learn from their mistakes. As an alternative, life imprisonment could be a good choice.
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