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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems as well as practical problems.

#country #language
It must be admitted that speaking a
second
language
 could be a great challenge. To illustrate, living in a place where you have to talk a foreign
language
 can possibly result in
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major social and practical issues. Overall, when people try to communicate with foreign words they may find plenty of difficulties in sending and
also
 receiving messages.
This
 could occur because of the speed of the talking
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 formation of the sentences as well. To clarify, Arabic
in
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 the
language
 used in many countries around the world. Take
for
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 example, Egyptians
they
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 have loads of words and
collocation
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 that are not found in any other regions that take Arabic as their mother tongue
language
. To solve
this
 communication problem more
practise
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 is needed and
also
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teacher
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 or recommended in
such
 situations.
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 more deeply at the issue of conveying a wrong message, we can find a crucial accident could take place just because of someone who cannot represent his thoughts in a different
language
.
For instance
, patients who give
inaccurate
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explanation
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 of their medical conditions might be diagnosed wrongly. As a
consequence
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 they might be treated ineffectively.
In contrast
, if a person has the ability to be bilingual and has a background
of
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 other cultures he or she will communicate correctly even with
limited
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 range of
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vocabularies
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. To conclude, speaking a
second
language
 has its threats but it
also
 can be avoidable
by
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 more
practise
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 and
studying
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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