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Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

#transport #government #people #disagree？
Public vehicles should be fully subsidied by
government
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the government
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 to promote the
the
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campaign of "save the earth". I hold the view of
government
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the government
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 should provide free transportation to citizens from travelling
one
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from one
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 place to another,
however
, many
of
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people
 disagree with
this
 opinion. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both sides and give reasons to support my agreement.
Firstly
, mother earth would be beneficial if
people
 are able to commute from one destination to another freely. In
this
 case, purchasing a private car might not be
neccessary
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necessary
 for many
people
, and it will reduce the air pollution which often
cause
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 by cars.
In addition
, not only
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a reduction
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 in moving
car
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cars
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 on the road but
also
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minimal
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the
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rate of
car
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a car
the car
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accident
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accidents
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.
Secondly
, grass will go greener and water will become cleaner due to the
declining
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 in air pollution.
For instance
, I still remember when I was a kid
,
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 when
the
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vehicles had not invented, the air
is
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used to be so clean and fress unlikely now our oxygen contains full of dust and chemical
molecule
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molecules
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 which we can't observe
it
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through
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with
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 bare eyes.
However
, some
of
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people
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the people
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 argue that public transport should not provide
complimentary
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complimentarily
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.
Explains
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 that, many organisations would be affected by
this
 minor action from the
government
such
 as vehicles manufacturer and petrol suppliers.
For instance
, several industries would lose their job or business because of
this
 implementation.
Besides
, it would increase the number of pessengers in
certain
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a certain
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period
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periods
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 of time and it would create
crowd
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crowds
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 that are unnecessary, which may cause
people
 to get injured. In conclusion,
although
 there are some reasonable arguments against whether
government
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the government
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 should provide free transportation, there can be no doubt that the potential advantages of free transport far
more
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outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. In
this
 case, I
am strongly agree
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 that
government
 should provide complimentary travel from one place to another.
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