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Public transport should be funded by the government so that it can be free for people who use it. To what extent do you agree or disagree？

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Public vehicles should be fully subsidied by
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government
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 to promote the
the
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campaign of "save the earth". I hold the view of
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government
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the government
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 should provide free transportation to citizens from travelling
one
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from one
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 place to another,
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, many
of
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people
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 disagree with
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 opinion. In
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 essay, I will discuss both sides and give reasons to support my agreement.
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, mother earth would be beneficial if
people
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 are able to commute from one destination to another freely. In
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neccessary
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necessary
 for many
people
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, and it will reduce the air pollution which often
cause
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 by cars.
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, not only
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a reduction
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 in moving
car
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cars
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 on the road but
also
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a minimal
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minimal
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the
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rate of
car
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a car
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accident
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accidents
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.
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, grass will go greener and water will become cleaner due to the
declining
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 in air pollution.
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, I still remember when I was a kid
,
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 when
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vehicles had not invented, the air
is
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used to be so clean and fress unlikely now our oxygen contains full of dust and chemical
molecule
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molecules
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 which we can't observe
it
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through
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with
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 bare eyes.
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, some
of
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people
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 argue that public transport should not provide
complimentary
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.
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 that, many organisations would be affected by
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 minor action from the
government
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such
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 as vehicles manufacturer and petrol suppliers.
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, several industries would lose their job or business because of
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 implementation.
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, it would increase the number of pessengers in
certain
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a certain
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period
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periods
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 of time and it would create
crowd
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 that are unnecessary, which may cause
people
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 to get injured. In conclusion,
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 there are some reasonable arguments against whether
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government
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the government
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 should provide free transportation, there can be no doubt that the potential advantages of free transport far
more
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outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. In
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am strongly agree
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 that
government
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 should provide complimentary travel from one place to another.
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