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Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more diadvantages?

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Now working long hours becoming more and more common in today’s lifestyle. Some
people
 of them devote themselves to working and rarely spend their
time
 on leisure activities. It
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will
 take more
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 than benefits. It will discuss two aspects in the following content. On the one hand, Many
people
 have to
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long
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time
 cause of
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the need
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a
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lot of money.
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, according to a recent survey of
people
 between the age
middle
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, a lot of
people
 are ready to work for 6 days a
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 to earn more and buy their favourite branded attires and various famous exorbitant electronic gadgets.
Secondly
, since some
people
 relax their work, they do not intend to take leave or devote
time
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 entertainment activities.
On the other hand
, naturally because of working long hours,
people
 devote less
time
 to their children and other close
people
. Working for a long
time
 is harmful to health
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 because the parts of the
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body
bady
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body
 that have worked for a long
time
 are very tired and need to rest from
time
 to
time
.
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, to the heart, to the brain and to others. Due to
this
, many elderly
people
 suffer from stroke, heart attack and similar serious diseases. In
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, in my view, I believe there are more disadvantages when it comes to working long times. Spending a lot of
time
 at work is very harmful to health.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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