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Advantages and disadvantages of travelling with a group.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of
people
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 travel with a
group
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instead
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 of alone.
This
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 essay will highlight both the benefits and drawbacks that result from
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 an approach.
First
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 off, there are some advantages to being in a
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 for travellers. The most important one is the security issues.
People
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 have more security on
group
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 travel because if all goes well or a problem arises, you will always be surrounded by
people
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.
On the other hand
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, since there is an organization of groups,
people
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 do not have to organize anything and bother themselves.
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, if you have an accident, get a disease or lost in nature,
people
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 can help you easily that's why
group
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trips
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 are more supportive .
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, there are some disadvantages for travellers in a
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. While you plan the day yourself on solo
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, there are programs and rules that
people
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 have to follow in
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trips
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. Within these rules,
people
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 are not allowed to do anything and are expected to treat each other with respect. At the same time, there will be no time for improvisation during the trip and you may need to travel with
people
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 of all ages if it is within an organization during the trip. The main factor is that all participants have to adapt to all of these.
In addition
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,
such
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group
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trips
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 are often slightly more expensive. In conclusion,
people
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 have various opinions regarding whether a solo trip or a
group
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 is better as they both have advantages and disadvantages.
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