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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today there is a heated debate on whether universities should encourage an equal share of
both
 genders in multifarious studies or not. I partially agree with
this
 statement and I will elucidate arguments to prove my opinion.
To begin
 with, a quota system for university enrolment would definitely provide ample opportunities for
both
males
 and
females
. The long-term result of
such
 a decision would be a trend, where an approximately equal
number
 of
both
 genders would be in multifarious branches,
such
 as engineering, nursing, programming and so on.
Such
 a trend will
also
 help to deal with gender stereotypes, as the
number
 of successful
males
 and
females
 in various sectors will strive for an equal quantity.
On the other hand
,
such
 change will affect the merit system of universities, as the school will,
first
 of all, try to fill the quotas of students, and only
then
 compare the honours and achievements of students.
Secondly
, reaching the same percentage of
both
 genders in different studies is almost impossible due to the fact that some subjects are prevalent among
males
, while others amidst
females
.
For example
, many male students tend to choose engineering degrees, which means that the competition among
males
 is relatively higher compared to the one among
females
. The equal
number
 of positions will destroy the balance because it would be much easier to enrol as a female student. In conclusion, the notion of an equal
number
 of men and women in university groups could help to deal with stereotypes, but it
also
 could lead to unfair university enrolment.
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