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Universities should accept equal members of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Today there is a heated debate on whether universities should encourage an equal share of
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 genders in multifarious studies or not. I partially agree with
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 statement and I will elucidate arguments to prove my opinion.
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 with, a quota system for university enrolment would definitely provide ample opportunities for
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males
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 and
females
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. The long-term result of
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 a decision would be a trend, where an approximately equal
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 of
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 genders would be in multifarious branches,
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 as engineering, nursing, programming and so on.
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 a trend will
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 help to deal with gender stereotypes, as the
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 of successful
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 and
females
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 in various sectors will strive for an equal quantity.
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,
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 change will affect the merit system of universities, as the school will,
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 of all, try to fill the quotas of students, and only
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 compare the honours and achievements of students.
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, reaching the same percentage of
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 genders in different studies is almost impossible due to the fact that some subjects are prevalent among
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, while others amidst
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.
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, many male students tend to choose engineering degrees, which means that the competition among
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 is relatively higher compared to the one among
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. The equal
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 of positions will destroy the balance because it would be much easier to enrol as a female student. In conclusion, the notion of an equal
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 of men and women in university groups could help to deal with stereotypes, but it
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 could lead to unfair university enrolment.
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