Recently published figures show that the wildlife population around the world has decreased by around fifty percent over the last fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wildlife around the world?

Nowadays, animals are decreasing in our
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even some are on verge of extinction. The latest published data revealed that flora and fauna
deducted
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to half in percentage in
last
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five
decade’s
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. In my opinion,
wildlife
can be conserved by spreading awareness and
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avoiding pollution. The main idea is to educate and aware community
regarding
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of
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importance
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the importance
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of
animal
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populace which can be done by
government
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through organising campaigns in favour of
safety
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and protection of
wildlife
in our environment. In my town,
for instance
, authorities and local
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organise fairs and rallies to avoid poaching or killing wild creatures.
Community
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should
also
volunteer for these types of approaches;
otherwise
, animals and their habitats would not be saved.
Thus
, educating people can become a crucial weapon as a
wildlife
saviour.
Other
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way is through restricting
water
and air pollution.
However
, authorities are playing
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role in it, but Individually people show carelessness.
Instead
of stopping pollutants, they are dumping huge piles of garbage and poisonous gases in rivers and
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fresh
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water
sources,
as a result
, natural reservoirs and air are getting polluted,
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directly
impacting
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animals.
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is to clean the
water
and air through
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of
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plans,
for example
,
water
purification refineries and planting new trees.
Therefore
, cleanliness and plants can protect
wildlife
. In conclusion, both government and common nationalists are equally responsible to provide safety to these natural creatures by circumventing hunting and keeping
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free from pollution.
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