Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweigh its drawbacks?

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In the present, many
countries
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depend on
tourism
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. In those
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countries
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tourism
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plays an important role as a main income source.
Tourism
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brings many advantages to the
country
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. But there are some disadvantages as well.
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essay will discuss the pros and cons of
tourism
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. First of all,
tourism
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is the main income source of many
countries
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around the world. There are many benefits of
tourism
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on the
countries
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. It raises the economy of the
country
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. It brings foreign currency to the
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. There are many
countries
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like Maldives,
Hawaii
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and Hawaii
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,
they
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which
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are totally
depending
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on
tourism
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. The government
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gets necessary funds to carry out large projects
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hotels,
shopping
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and shopping
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malls.
Tourism
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helps to develop facilities – roads, public places,
air ports
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airports
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, transportation and many more.
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it creates thousands and thousands of jobs in many areas.
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in
hospitality
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the hospitality
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field. These jobs are not only part of
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apply
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tourism
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, they are part of the whole nation. The other important benefit is it helps to create unity among people from different
countries
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.
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contrast
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there are some negatives of
tourism
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as well. The major problem is environmental pollution. Thousands of tourists may visit famous destinations.
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leads to environmental pollution.
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the damage done to the local culture. Many
countries
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face
clash
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between different cultures and
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damage the communities.
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Tourism
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The tourism
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industry has some negative sides, but it does not outweigh the positive impact on the economy of the
country
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. I believe that the benefits of
tourism
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outweigh its drawbacks.
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task response
Ensure that all parts of the prompt are fully addressed in the essay. Provide a balanced discussion of both the advantages and disadvantages of tourism, supported by specific examples.
coherence cohesion
Organize the essay into clear paragraphs with topic sentences and supporting details. Use transition words to enhance coherence and cohesion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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