Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others belive that chikdren who are taught to cooperate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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era, some individuals believe that
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should be encouraged to compete with other children, while other argue that they should grow up without competing with others.
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they should learn how to cooperate, which can lead them to get success. From my perspective, encouraging competition from
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age can be more beneficial because nowadays almost all
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a great effort and competing with others make them achieve great things in
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in teams. I believe that to get good results,
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should be able to cooperate with
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of people to accomplish a common goal.
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valuable employee or a successful
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. To achieve a particular result, everyone in a group should be cooperative.
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of cooperative
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team sports
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as cricket, football and rugby.
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, competition helps a juvenile to gain extraordinary success in
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to suggest that
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teenagers to compete and not be afraid of losing
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their chances of getting success or becoming a
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, they may grow up to become a
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like Elon Musk, who is willing to experiment and not afraid to fail to stay ahead of his competitors, if they try to compete with other individuals. To recapitulate, it is true that being a cooperative
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can be advantageous in teamwork as well as in
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but I firmly believe that competitiveness is an even more important
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a child would achieve greatness in the future.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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