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Crime novels and TV series have become quite popular in recent years. What is your opinion about these crime dramas?

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 millennium, it is undeniable that
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 dramas on TV as well as novels regarding it are becoming quite popular among
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humankind
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 era, there are
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 of series and movies telecast on TV channels as well as on OTT platforms. Among that half of the content is about
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.
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, there are so many books available in the market which are based on
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real life
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 criminals and imaginary
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 novels. In these platforms sometimes criminal characters portrait like
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 with elegant
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, which can create appalling effects on individuals. By watching it few
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 develop
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mindset
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 and they start to idolise that character of the series, movie or novel. Numerous studies have consistently found that because of these negative mindset crimes in
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 of it is
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 attack at Mosque in New
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 by a person in 2019. He has
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 on Facebook. After
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, he agreed that he did it by taking inspiration from TV series.
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, These
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 of
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 dramas on digital platforms as well as in books provide information and spread awareness about
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 evilness. ,
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 because of
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, most of society become more alert against crimes. To
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,
crime
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 shows often educate their audience on how to prevent an attack, so they get to know how to deal with
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 situations. To recapitulate, these
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 dramas and novels
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 both positive and negative aspects in
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human life. If a person takes it as a learning lesson
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 a bunch of positive impacts rather than developing
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