The omnipresence of charities and governmental assistance packages leaves little room for self-reliance to survive adversity. In about 300 words, state whether you agree or disagree with this opinion and explain the reasons.

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These days, initiatives carried on by authorities and social services organizations, are bringing far more drawbacks than benefits to our

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, those who obtain these benefits end up losing all their abilities to independently survive and prosper. I strongly agree with

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view as

people

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not only stop looking for a job and become lazy but

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these policies bring anger among citizens due to the poor use of their tax money.

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, despite the fact that many charities do try their best to help individuals in need, they end up causing laziness and sedentarism to most

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. Owing to the jobseeker income they receive without any effort,

people

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no longer look for jobs.

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, when Australia released jobseeker salaries after the pandemic event,

people

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no longer tried to continue their careers or get jobs, as those wages proved sufficient for their basic needs.

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, Australia's economy is increasingly struggling and will probably not recover for another decade. On top of that, governmental assistance packages not only are detrimental to a

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's survival skills but

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cause more mental health problems to those in need.

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is because, when individuals stop working for a living, they lose their sense of purpose and their role in

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. In many developing countries,

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, where assistance packages are issued in large numbers, those unemployed end up living on the streets due to their mental struggles.

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, the taxpayers' money gets wasted on actions that only cause more harm than good to a nation. To conclude, even though charities and organizations have mainly good intentions, I strongly believe that their assistance proves detrimental to a

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's economy and overall well-being.

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