Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born.What might be the reasons for this?What are the advantages and disadvantages

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Some
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live in a
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close to where they were born.
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essay agrees that
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live in a place close to their homeland.
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this
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essay discusses the advantages of living in other
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negative aspects. On the one hand,there are advantages
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living in foreign
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.
People
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who live in other
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learn new things.They master their fields better.
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,according to statistics,
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far away from their longing for their
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,and of course,
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situation leads to an increase in
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’s patriotism.
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,there are many disadvantages of living in another foreign
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.Some
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who live in another
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may not want to return to their
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later.
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has a negative impact on the decrease of the population and development of our
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.
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, according to the data,a decrease in the population of a
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leads to the dispersal of that nation. In the end,some
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live in other
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.I think it
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for
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to live in other places for a certain period of time and return to their place of birth as
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qualified
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in their profession.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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