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More and more people buy a wide range of household goods like television,microwave open and rice cooker .Do you think this is positive or negative development ?

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Nowadays, an increasing
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 of
people
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 buy new technological household goods
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 as television and rice cooker. Since these advanced households make life easier than before,
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 essay will examine why I believe it is a positive development.
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 off, after the inventions and innovations due to the development of technology, the quality of
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's live remarkably increased.
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, while
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 are spending more
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 cooking in the old
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, now it can be handled easily with a microwave.
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 kind of thing helps to save a lot of
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 in a day, so
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 may spend their remaining
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 with their family or do some hobbies.
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, those not only help to save
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 but
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 provide a large educational and entertainment source
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 as watching TV
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 and playing video games which gradually become a vital part of our life, especially children.
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, with all these benefits come a
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 of disadvantages. The chief con is growing laziness, leading to a sedentary lifestyle.
People
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 often misuse these luxuries and get used to everything being served to them on a silver platter. They forget the essence of hard work. The overuse of television, mobiles, laptops and other devices has proven to hinder
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's pursuit of their hobbies and sports.
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,
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 has
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 led to growing levels of obesity and health problems as
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 have become increasingly lethargic, causing lack of exercise to become a rampant problem among today's youth.
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, according to research conducted in Canada, the
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 of
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 who have obesity is tripled from 20 years ago and the main reason for addiction to the computer. In conclusion, a growing
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 of
people
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 nowadays start to buy a wide range of household products. As modern technology is helping us to improve our life and our productivity, I believe that the advantages of those household goods outweigh the disadvantages.
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