Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages?

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individuals expend most of their existence residing neighbourhood
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where they
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From my point of view, it has more pros than cons,
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it
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conversational
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. There are a number of significant benefits that it is to
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able to study. Take an example young people who are far from
home
will have the necessary conditions for studying if they study at
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, some things may prevent them from studying. Obstructive things like the destruction of younger brothers or sisters or the handing over of chores by family members will have a negative effect on their studies. Another
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is that some may not have advantageous financial conditions at
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conditions to their own homes. Turning to
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side of the argument a person who spends more time away from
home
spends less time with his family.
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, a person in another place rarely communicates with his family, misses them and cannot participate in various family activities.
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leads to estrangement from one's family, resulting in forgetting social etiquette. Another negative
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is that people who are not at
home
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reason of when they are in
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alternative place, they will have some difficulty in getting along with strangers and there will be a deficit in the financial budget without finding a job for themselves. In conclusion, after thinking about all that has been said, I have come to the conclusion that living far away, along with the difficulty of being away from family, prevents spending time with relatives, which reduces communication.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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