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Families who do not sent their children to government-financed schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Education is a primary need in society. Making it a business will not hamper the student but
also
 might destroy many lives.
Tax
 is important for growth in states. No
tax
 might leads to stopping the growth of a nation. Everyone is bound to pay the
government
, even
government
 employees pay the
tax
. Let me throw some lights in detail. The schools which are not financed by the
government
 might have an X factor than the Vidyalaya which are funded by the
government
. The X factors may be having a large swimming pool or a large playground. Here the property
tax
 is bound for the private schools. I believe the
tax
 amount is already charged by the student which is included in their fee structure. Directly or indirectly every private school pays taxes.
Moreover
, it will be discriminative if some pay the
tax
 and other doesn't. And
also
 to avail of all the facilities that are provided by the private school you have to pay more fee and to give all those facilities to the children the school have to pay more taxes to the
government
. To conclude, I totally disagree with the statement that families who send their children to private schools should not pay taxes.
Instead
, parents can ask universities to reduce the fee.
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