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Band 5

According to most people, it is actually impossible to achieve work-life balance during employment. Do you agree with this statement?

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There is a class of people who believe that working employee cannot balance their professional
life
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 and personal
life
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 together. It
is actually varies
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 from person to person and between professions too. I
am not agree
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do not agree
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 with
this
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 given statement and
this
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 essay will elaborate
my
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 point of view in detail in
following
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 paragraph.
To begin
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 with, with the advancement of technology and development
life
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 in the contemporary world has been very fast
where
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and
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 people are running 24*7 to achieve their dreams and make their
life
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 lucrative. Being on top
in
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of
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this
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 race they often fail to think of their family and kids which make their personal
life
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 like
a sinking ships
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a sinking ship
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 in
middle
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the middle
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 of
sea
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the sea
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.
For instance
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, famous
bollywood
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Bollywood
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 star, Malaika Arora and like
her
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many other stars often
get
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gets
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 divorced soon after their marriage.
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, there is another class of people who are quite sharp
managing
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in managing
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 their office work or professional
life
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 and their personal
life
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 together. To achieve that, they often compromise with their job or work, for them family time and satisfaction is on
the
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top
then
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 earning more money.
Moreover
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, for them earning less money and getting more time for family is
priority
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a priority
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 and handling a duty and job at
same
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the same
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 time is never a daunting task for them.
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,
well known
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 cricketer Sachin Tendulkar is still living a happy
life
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 with his family even after
such
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 a remarkable success. To recapitulate, managing personal
life
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 and professional
life
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 during employment is always possible if
person
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the person
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 on the other side is quite determined to do and
if
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wishes for the same.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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