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Nowadays because of digital technology it is possible for not only studios but also individuals to produce their own films. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#technology #studios #individuals #films #development
In the era of digitalization, technology has allowed the production of
films
to
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 professionals as well as
to
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ordinary
people
.
Although
this
 might increase subordinate quality
films
, overall,
this
 is a positive transition because it creates employment
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opportunities
opportunites
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opportunities
 and distinguished genres of movies.
To begin
 with, when individuals create motion pictures, they get to earn money. Since no special
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degrees
degress
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degree
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using the internet to learn video editing skills enables even high school drop-outs to make a livelihood.
Besides
this
, they earn name and fame and become well-known
people
.
For instance
, many
youtubers
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YouTubers
 are known by a large
number of
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population for their work and
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.
Secondly
, young
enthusiasts
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video-makers
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and video-makers
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 create movies based on unique subjects and try to present fresh perspectives in society. Many
people
 like their array of works, ranging from environmental issues to disparate socioeconomic backgrounds and comedies to crimes. The greater the diverse culture of film stories, the more
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gratification
people
 accrue from watching them.
However
, some
people
 argue that
this
 engenders
to
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excess poor
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. Since normal
people
 are non-professionals and
novice
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, they do not master the skills of videography. Lacking the
suffice
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 acumen of producing quality
films
, many
films
 are inferior or have
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storyline
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, resulting in an increase
of
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 mediocre
films
. To conclude, despite the fact that general
people
 during their fledgling stages of
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producing
production
producting
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producing
films
 may not create
immpecable
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impeccable
 or blockbuster movies,
this
 is not negative development because film-making with the help of modern technology
have
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 opened doors to employment
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opportunities
opportunites
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opportunities
 and the production of some phenomenal works that
has
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 received great appreciation and lauds
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