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Some people believe that it is good to share as much information as possible in scientific research, business and the academic world. Others believe that some information is too important or too valuable to share freely.

#people #information #research #business #world
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 plenty of
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 for every profession to develop their knowledge or organization. Some
people
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 believe that the
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such
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 as scientific research,
business
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 and the academic world is good to
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 freely, while others think that some
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 is the most essential to
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. In
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views will be discussed in detail. It is
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 to say that
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 of scientific research,
business
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 and the academic world there are good to
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society as free because in some country they are not more opportunities than
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wealth
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can access to the best education.
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,
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 which can provide benefit to
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study.
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 these are the golden opportunity for small and medium-sized
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enterprises
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 or SMEs to collect
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data and develop their
business
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 freely.
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, there are some
people
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 who believe that some data should not
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also
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a confidential
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confidential information
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information
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 which could not
to
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share
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with
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people
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not
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.
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, fast-moving consumer goods or FMCG companies
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share
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product
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products
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 or marketing
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plans
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to
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 the public since they should protect the
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 from competitors even though it is important for some
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 to
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 their knowledge
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 as students. Another one, some
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 might be approved by some organizations that are related
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 knowledge before publishing. To conclude, sharing
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business
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, and
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academic world is important to
people
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education.
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 confidential
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 even if it is important to someone.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • information sharing
  • scientific research
  • business
  • academic world
  • advancement of knowledge
  • progress
  • collaboration
  • cross-disciplinary research
  • open access
  • democratization of information
  • transparency
  • credibility
  • intellectual property
  • security concerns
  • commercial interests
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