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University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

#university #students #tuition #fees #society
Some
people
 think that university pupils must pay all
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tuition
tution
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tuition
 fees because
thats
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 to them only, not
the
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society.
However
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disagree
disgree
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disagree
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prospective
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 and will explain my points in
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Firstly
, if a student
have
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 a good education and degree from university it can be helpful for the local
business
 because he or she putting his energy and knowledge
to
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 the
business
. That
further
 can give productive
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 to
business
 owners.
Secondly
, if universities
offers
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education
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with
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 valuable prices
then
 poor
people
 can afford to go for higher studies in
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colleges. According to
survey
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, 60% of students who belongs to poor families
dont
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don't
 go to universities because of high fees.
Furthermore
, if pupils are getting
education
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 free
then
 they can teach their
offsprings
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 that
further
 help society to keep aware of issues.
This
 can raise the number of educated
people
 in
the
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society.
Also
, those educated
people
 with their talent and knowledge can open up
the
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business
 that will
further
 help to improve the poverty rate in the country. To sum up, it is important for
government
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 to make university studies
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with
wity
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at
 affordable prices so that
people
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