University students must pay all tuition fees, because it benefits mostly them individually, rather than the society as a whole. Do you agree or disagree?

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people
think that university pupils must pay all
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fees because
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to them only, not
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society.
However
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disagree
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and will explain my points in
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paragraphs.
Firstly
, if a student
have
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a good education and degree from university it can be helpful for the local
business
because he or she putting his energy and knowledge
to
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the
business
. That
further
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to
business
owners.
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, if universities
offers
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education
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with
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valuable prices
then
poor
people
can afford to go for higher studies in
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colleges. According to
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, 60% of students who belongs to poor families
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don't
go to universities because of high fees.
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education
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free
then
they can teach their
offsprings
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that
further
help society to keep aware of issues.
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can raise the number of educated
people
in
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society.
Also
, those educated
people
with their talent and knowledge can open up
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business
that will
further
help to improve the poverty rate in the country. To sum up, it is important for
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to make university studies
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affordable prices so that
people
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