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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, whcih causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugae. Do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Almost all
food
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 and beverages are available in packed form but processed
food
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 and drinks contain very high amounts of sugar. To make them less consumable for
people
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, the
Prices
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 of these products should be increased so that few
people
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 can buy them. I strongly disagree with
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 statement and in
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 essay, I will give reasons to support my argument.
Firstly
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,
People
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 have to take their
health
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 seriously. We are living in an age where
people
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 are very busy and they don't have time to make fresh
food
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 or juices so their dependence on readymade
food
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 is increasing rapidly. The above-mentioned
food
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 and drinks contain a high amount of sugar
that is
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 very harmful to
health
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 because
this
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 will create high blood pressure, Diabetes and a high level of cholesterol across all age groups. So no matter how busy you are, your
health
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 should be your
first
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 priority and you have to take time to eat healthy
food
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.
Secondly
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, If the
prices
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 of these items are abnormal may be few
people
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 not buy them but most
people
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 continue to purchase them as usual because now they are addicted to them.
For example
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, many countries already double the
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 of cigarettes but the consumption is still almost the same as before the price hike. which shows only an increase in
prices
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 will not be enough and we have to create awareness in
people
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. In conclusion, we have to create awareness in the public regarding the
health
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 problems which they might face because of consuming high amounts of sugar in packed foods and drinks. We have to launch public advertisements through digital media to ensure that
people
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 should be aware of the consequences of the above-mentioned
health
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 problems. Once
people
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 know, how these items are affecting their lives day by day
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 they will automatically reduce their consumption and adopt a healthier lifestyle.
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