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Some people say that living in big cities is becoming more difficult. Others say that it is getting easier. Discuss both points of view and give your opinion.

#people #cities #points
The bar chart illustrates the
number
 of various
food
items
 on average daily servings in
winter
 and
summer
 at the Brisk Café. 

Overall, thot
coffee
 and
soup
 were more popular in
winter
 than in
summer
, whereas iced
coffee
 and
ice
cream
 were
larger
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number
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numbers
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 in
summer
 than in
winter
.
In addition
, the
sales
amount
 of
salad
 remained the same by
season
.

 The daily
sales
 figure for hot
coffee
 was about 75 in
winter
, the largest
amount
 to other
items
 in comparison, but it fell to only just 30 in
summer
.
Additionally
, the daily
sales
 of
soup
was
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were
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 50 on average, while it dropped to half the
number
 in
summer
comparing
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compared
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 to cold
weather
.
In contrast
, 
it is worth noting that the
sales
number
 of
ice
cream
 was 25 in
cold
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the cold
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season
, increasing by 10 in hot
weather
.
Likewise
, iced
coffee
 was sold less than 5 on average in freezing
weather
, and
then
 it saw the largest difference in the daily
number
 of
food
sales
, which went up to 40 in
boiled
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the boiled
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season
.
Moreover
,
salad
 stayed
the
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apply
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unchanged
number
 in
different
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a different
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season
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seasons
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, at around 25.
number
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a number
the number
show examples
 of various
food
items
 on average daily servings in
winter
 and
summer
 at the Brisk Café. 

Overall, thot
coffee
 and
soup
 were more popular in
winter
 than in
summer
, whereas iced
coffee
 and
ice
cream
 were
larger
Add an article
a larger
the larger
show examples
number
Change the noun form
numbers
show examples
 in
summer
 than in
winter
.
In addition
, the
sales
amount
 of
salad
 remained the same by
season
.

 The daily
sales
 figure for hot
coffee
 was about 75 in
winter
, the largest
amount
 to other
items
 in comparison, but it fell to only just 30 in
summer
.
Additionally
, the daily
sales
 of
soup
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 50 on average, while it dropped to half the
number
 in
summer
comparing
Wrong verb form
compared
show examples
 to cold
weather
.
In contrast
, 
it is worth noting that the
sales
number
 of
ice
cream
 was 25 in
cold
Add an article
the cold
show examples
season
, increasing by 10 in hot
weather
.
Likewise
, iced
coffee
 was sold less than 5 on average in freezing
weather
, and
then
 it saw the largest difference in the daily
number
 of
food
sales
, which went up to 40 in
boiled
Correct article usage
the boiled
show examples
season
.
Moreover
,
salad
 stayed
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
unchanged
number
 in
different
Add an article
a different
show examples
season
Fix the agreement mistake
seasons
show examples
, at around 25.
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