Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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we need them or not. A group of
people
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attract
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to buy products. Others,
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I will discuss both
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people
in different ways including, billboards, social media and leafletting.
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, youtube is a great influencer these days and when we are watching on it, some
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are running. Those
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selling.
On the other hand
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not make any difference
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we buy or not.
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companies pay a huge revenue
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when
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announcement
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it makes them
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frustrated
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frustrated
and they
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don't
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, during sports certain
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are running which make
people
furious and mostly skipped by them to enjoy their
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interest
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are no longer important. To conclude,
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statements. Advertisement is a kind of trick which sometimes work for a business but
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not according to population. In my opinion, I believe that
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instead
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if sellers reduce the price more products will sell.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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