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some say that modern technology is giving people more fre time, while others think it is making them busier. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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In
this
 contemporary epoch, the benefits
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 cutting-edge
technology
 have become a controversial argument. Whilst some opponents emphasize that technological gadgets waste individuals'
time
, proponents and I adopt a diverse stance because they
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 and will continue
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 different aspects of life much easier. In
this
 essay, both views, along with my opinion will be
further
 elaborated. On the one hand, despite disagreeing with the view that emerging
technology
 wastes students'
time
, some critics are of the belief that
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threat
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 these new means of
technology
 since they spend a significant amount of
time
 utilizing
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smart phones
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.
This
 means that when teenagers become chained to their electronic devices, they will lose the sense of
time
, and
this
 will end up
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 a procrastinating generation. An eminent example of
this
 is social media platforms
such
 as Facebook which has drawn the attention of the overwhelming majority of youth.
Therefore
, what can be said is that communication
technology
 has led to
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 of
time
 appreciation.
On the other hand
, the latest electronic gadgets have revolutionized different aspects
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modern life
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 and saved ample
time
 because they have broken down the barriers between nations.
In other words
, if mothers rely on new online shopping websites, a plethora of
time
 and effort will be saved.
This
 can be witnessed by Amazon through
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witch
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 of tasks can be achieved within
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Accordingly
, in a final analysis new technological inventions have offered
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plenty of
time
 for people from different age groups. After
this
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technology
 accelerated the recent era, but
also
 they have to be dealt with carefully. Eventually, I am convinced that without modern gadgets,
time
 could not have been plentiful.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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