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In some countries an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kid of food. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#countries #people #health #food #governments #tax #kid
Deeply fried
food
 contains
large
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amount
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amounts
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 of calories.
This
 high intake of calories
are
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 injurious to health.All developed countries including US and Canada are crowded with big chain stores of fast
food
 centres including
Mc-Donald's
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McDonald's
,KFC-Chicken and Domino's etc.
As a result
,more and more locals are developing
obessity
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obesity
 and coronary heart diseases at
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a very
very
avery
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a very
 early age.In my opinion,
authories
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authorises
authorities
 must initiate high taxation
such
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kind
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kinds
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 of edibles.
Quality
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The quality
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 of lifestyle in people across the whole world is deteriorating eventually.People are relying more on ordering fried fast
food
 and avoiding
home-made
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homemade
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 cuisines.Obesity and cardiac diseases will increase around the globe in an exponential manner
,
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if proper and rigid rules are not implemented.
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Government
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Government
Goverment
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 must take
responsibilities
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responsibility
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 and put higher revenue for individuals having
food
 from
such
 fast
food
 centres. Due to
sedentary
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a sedentary
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 lifestyle and higher growth of working individuals,
current
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 youth population are completely dependent on junk consumables.
A statistical
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 analysis
have
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 suggested that
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the worlds
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worlds
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world's
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 60% of junk
food
 consumption is entirely by younger adults,followed by
pediatric
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the pediatric
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 population of about 35% and
lastly
 15% by
geriatric
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the geriatric
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 group.On a contrary,
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underdeveloped
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under developed
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underdeveloped
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 countries have shown
very
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a very
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 little consumption rate of fast
food
 when compared with
the
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developed nations.
Additionally
,governing bodies must
also
 order schools to implement education regarding awareness and
importance
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the importance
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 of having healthy
food
 and leading
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle
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lifestyles
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.
Therefore
,we all have a role to play in decreasing health problems related to our eating habits.If taken care
properly
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of properly
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,we will be able to reduce the frequency of
such
 premature cardiac
illness
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illnesses
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occurring
occuring
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occurring
 in our current generation.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Prevalence
  • Deterrent
  • Consumption
  • Revenue
  • Public health initiatives
  • Lower-income populations
  • Government intervention
  • Taxation
  • Nutrition
  • Sedentary lifestyles
  • Junk food tax
  • Access
  • Affordability
  • Health issues
  • Fair means
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