the rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style . what are the advantages of this trend ? do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

these days,
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getting popular among
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people
. the constant increase in
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for the
people
which contain the speed in luxury living style .
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this
essay both give
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benefit
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and
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of
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this
trend.
moreover
,there
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drawback
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than
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serval
drawback
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of having
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. I would like to outline
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behind it which is unhealthy because convenience
food
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having
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meal
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in a day which doesn't contain
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protein . to illustrate, in America due to their busy schedule they use
instant
food
on daily basis and 95 % public consume noodles and
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food
in their house
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and noodles as well as.
furthermore
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it
such
as
instant
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also
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people
to consume. as
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to
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food
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more
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.
secondly
, I would love to highlight some useful thing which
instant
food
provide in their living style
such
as
instant
food
take less time for cooking the
food
but many
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people
get helpful
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the
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instant
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less and less time to cook the
food
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that
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cook is
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. a person just
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to fry into it .
for example
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they give more preference to
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instant
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when they get back from their job so they can just cook it in the
second
which is quite easy for them. addition, one more point in the advantages
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instant
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just
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a minute. to sum up, increase in the number of
people
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ready made
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food
. as told there are more disadvantages rather than
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