the rise of convenience foods has helped people keep up with the speed of the modern life style . what are the advantages of this trend ? do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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on daily basis and 95 % public consume noodles and
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take less time for cooking the
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when they get back from their job so they can just cook it in the
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