Nowadays, there is a growing trend of private car ownership. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages or environmental problems associated with this?

In
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recent years, our country seeing an increase in the ownership of private cars particularly in terms of convenient transport options. I believe
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has a greater number of negatives than positives and both will be covered in
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paragraphs. Globally,
car
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become part of many
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for their convenient facilities,
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can offer as quickly as we need to reach our target and saving our time. Not only for
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life but
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can be the most vehicle for
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us safe from
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accident. As you can see,
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the car
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car
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can give us
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more
convenient
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in our routine and more privacy to travel.
On the other hand
, The negative effects of cars on our world are numerous.
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, traffic jams
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global warming by many
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from
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.
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to become
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accident
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if
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didn't have consciousness much so it might
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effect
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another driver
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.
As a result
,
car
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can
also
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many
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disadvantages as well. To sum up, from my point of view,
although
private cars can
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us many comfortable in daily life, it
mights
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might
bacame
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became
traffic
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and air
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pollution
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • private car ownership
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • environmental problems
  • convenient transportation
  • flexibility
  • comfort
  • traffic congestion
  • air pollution
  • fossil fuel consumption
  • climate change
  • deforestation
  • resource depletion
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