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Pie Charts Giving Information about the Household Expenditure of an Average US Family IELTS

The pie charts illustrate the
costs
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 of living for ordinary US
family
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families
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 in two given periods, 1970 and 2004. the expenditure on mortgages increased by half of the overall
costs
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 and other expenditures decreased in 2004. Overall, in 2014 most of the family's money was spent on the mortgage which is 50%
however
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, it was just 26% in 1970 which means other
costs
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such
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 as entertainment, food, transport, childcare and, clothing decreased in 2014. In both years most of the family income was spent on a mortgage, 26 per cent in 1970 and 50 per cent in 2014. food and clothing were necessary in both years and they stand in
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 and
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 place in order. In 1970 childcare payment was below average by just 1%
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, entertainment was famous by 13%. In 2014, other
costs
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 declined except for mortgage which rose by 24% and childcare which reached 10%.
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, there was
a
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transport that hasn't changed at all.

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