Some companies sponsor sport and sports stars as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Sponsoring local
sports
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teams as a marketing
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strategy

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stratergy
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strategy

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is a common practice used by
companies
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worldwide.
However
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, there is a crucial discussion regarding the pros and cons of
this
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tactic used by different commercial organizations.
This
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essay will elucidate the pros and cons of
this
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phenomenon
,
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apply

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and will explain why I think it is a positive
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occurrence
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occurrence

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occurance
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occurrence
. There
are
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a multitude of significant advantages for
players
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in acquiring financial
aids
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aid

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from
companies
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.
Firstly
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,
sports
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that do not
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receive
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receive

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recieve
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receive
adequate funding from the government to ameliorate their performance can be supported with
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this
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measures;
thus
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, facilitating them to enhance their quality of practice. There are many local
sports
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in Sri Lanka that are being sponsored by multinational
companies
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and
shown
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improved outcomes.
Secondly
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, when rural
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tournaments
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tournaments

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tournements
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tournaments
are funded by
such
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huge cooperations, it will ultimately, provide the rural
players
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an
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upperhand
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to gain publicity and attention from the local national teams as well as, well-reputed
sports
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clubs. Many Sri Lankan cricketers have made the Sri Lankan team with
such
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opportunities.
Although
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company sponsorships are helpful, there can be negative
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repercussions
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repurcussions
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repercussions
to it.
In
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on
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hand, more pressure may be held upon the
players
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since they are holding the reputation of the company they are being sponsored
;
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by; therefore

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therefore
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, playing with a relaxed mental state will be challenging for them.
On the other hand
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, these
players
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may unintentionally promote unhealthy merchandise to
the
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apply

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society which will mislead them, and they will not be able to prevent it based
of
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on

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legislative reasons. A most popular example
for
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of

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this
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is a dispute between a popular football player and a global beverage brand questioning the healthiness of the brand on public media.
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In spite
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of all the
demerites
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demerits
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it possesses, I believe the merits of
companies
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sponsoring
sports
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cannot be neglected. When a multinational company funds a sport, they provide
an
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immense financial support for the team to buy necessary supplies
such
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as
sports
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equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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,
nutrition
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supplement
supplements
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supplement
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suppliment
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supplements
.
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, they will execute plans to economically stabilize well-talented sportsmen in order to elevate their accomplishments which will
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eventually
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evetually
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eventually
, guide
to
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championships. In conclusion, it can be recapitulated that, despite the harmful impacts of letting financial organizations
to
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support
sports
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, a substantial development in
sports
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can be witnessed with their support. Even so, according to my judgement, local authorities must
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implement
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impliment
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certain legal restrictions to avoid unnecessary tension and influence given by these
companies
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on
players
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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  • target audience
  • endorsement deals
  • positive association
  • commercial interests
  • conflict of interest
  • over-reliance
  • excessive commercialization
  • sportsmanship
  • athletic performance
  • corporate sponsorship
  • fan engagement
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