People who travel to another country to live, work or study for a period of time often suffer badly from homesickness. Why is it? What are the best ways to reduce this problem?

Nowadays, travelling to another country is a very common trend. The reasons for travelling can be different
such
as study or work etc. Most
people
have homesickness when they are outside or far away from their homes.
This
happens because of a new
place
, strange
people
, and no friends or family at all. I will discuss it
further
and present some points to overcome
this
issue. First of all, when someone moves to a new
place
, it is very difficult to manage individually.
For instance
, juveniles go abroad
for studying
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, and when they have to live alone without family,
then
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it becomes the reason for their homesickness.
Moreover
, in a foreign country , there is nobody whom we know personally and
hence
we are not able to share with anyone how we are feeling and no one especially has enough time to
listen
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our problems. Second of all, when
people
go to a new
place
, it is normal to
have
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sadness because they cannot understand where they have to go for their daily needs and
as a result
, they remember their family members
such
as their parents.
Additionally
,
people
who transfer
due to
their work have to suffer a lot as well. Workers in outside countries have to manage everything and they have to look after their family members back home, so it is obvious to have homesickness because they are not living with their family. There are many ways to prevent
this
issue. In the first
place
, they should make new friends and should increase their friend circle so that they might feel good when they
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sad or upset.
In addition
, it is a better idea to go outside in their leisure time so that they could be familiar with the new
place
.
Apart from
this
, add some activities in daily life
such
as walking, and running , in
this
way they will refresh their mind as well. In conclusion,
this
is very difficult to live without family, but
people
have to make their
life
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better by adding some extra effort.
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