Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news event. Do you think the advantages of this technology outweigh the disadvantages?

nowadays, many people rely on
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media
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to stay connected with
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loved ones and to get to know about current affairs, in my
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it has certain cons like the lack of social interaction and
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inappropriate
innappropriate
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content. but the pros
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a leap because of comfort and ease of transmission. one of the major
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of social
media
is that
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communication has become easy in
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today's
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era through the
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for example
,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
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,
facebook
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and
instagram
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.
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its chatting or video calling we have everything available in our hands.
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the comfort of our
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we can enjoy news, films dramas and all other important
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events.,
in addition
, it saves time and effort we can do
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while enjoying our favourite shows in peace.
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every
such
ease comes with some drawbacks,
for instance
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been lost due to excessive
use
of social
media
, families are drifting apart and no one
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time for family events.,
furthermore
, sometimes there is so much adult
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except
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that
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our young generation,s innocent minds. in conclusion,
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strongly agree our life has become much
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easier with the
use
of social
media
but on the
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contrary
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contarary
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everything is good when
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used
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limits. we should
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definitely
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definitely
make
use
of technology but relationships and family life should
also
be balanced.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • real-time updates
  • global connectivity
  • professional networking
  • fake news
  • misinformation
  • social media addiction
  • mental health issues
  • privacy concerns
  • personal information
  • viral content
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