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Some people use social media to keep in touch with other people and news event. Do you think the advantages of this technology outweigh the disadvantages?

#people #media #touch #news #event #technology
nowadays, many people rely on
social
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media
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 to stay connected with
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their
 loved ones and to get to know about current affairs, in my
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 it has certain cons like the lack of social interaction and
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inappropriate
innappropriate
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 content. but the pros
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 a leap because of comfort and ease of transmission. one of the major
benefit
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 of social
media
 is that
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communication has become easy in
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today's
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 era through the
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for example
,
whatsapp
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WhatsApp
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,
facebook
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 and
instagram
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.
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wether
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 its chatting or video calling we have everything available in our hands.
at
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 the comfort of our
house
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 we can enjoy news, films dramas and all other important
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events.,
in addition
, it saves time and effort we can do
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 while enjoying our favourite shows in peace.
in
addition
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 every
such
 ease comes with some drawbacks,
for instance
, emotional connection
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 been lost due to excessive
use
 of social
media
, families are drifting apart and no one
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 time for family events.,
furthermore
, sometimes there is so much adult
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except
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that
taht
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that
 is
damageing
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damaging
 our young generation,s innocent minds. in conclusion,
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 strongly agree our life has become much
more
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easier with the
use
 of social
media
 but on the
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contrary
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contrary
contarary
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 everything is good when
its
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 used
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 limits. we should
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definitely
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definitely
 make
use
 of technology but relationships and family life should
also
 be balanced.
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