In the past important knowledge of culture and history was stored in the museums. Nowadays information is freely available on the internet therefore is no need of museums. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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are both a

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knowledge

knowladge

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knowledge

hub that

showcase

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the

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history and culture and

also

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as a guardian

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historical valuable items. With

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of information technology, some argue

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museums

can be completely replaced by

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. In my opinion,

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the museum

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museum

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would never be replaced by any media since the learning experience and academic discussions it creates cannot be done over the world wide web.

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museums

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with, the way

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knowledge

knowladge

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knowledge

is provided to the visitors in a museum

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can not

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other means. They

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environment

environement

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for the visitor to fully concentrate on the history and culture and escape from other distractors. The

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views of certain

artifacts

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on display,

for instance

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online media.

Therefore

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should be maintained as they are done despite having

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in technology.

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scholars in all areas together to conserve valuable

artificats

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which invariably leads to

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knowledge

knowladge

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knowledge

and views of the past and traditions.

These valuable discussion

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would lead to

rediscovery

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the rediscovery

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of the past and shed new light on mysteries.

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has inspired many young engineers to

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incorporate

incoporate

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incorporate

those techniques in their current work. Unless they have

physicaly

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physically

visited the museum, they would not have appreciated the wonder of past creations. In conclusion,

Museums

should remain even in

this

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technologically

advanced era, because the platform of education and

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knowledge

knowladge

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development could not be replaced by technological advances.

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