In the past important knowledge of culture and history was stored in the museums. Nowadays information is freely available on the internet therefore is no need of museums. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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knowladge
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hub that
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history and culture and
also
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as a guardian
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the
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historical valuable items. With
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of information technology, some argue
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museums
can be completely replaced by
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. In my opinion,
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would never be replaced by any media since the learning experience and academic discussions it creates cannot be done over the world wide web.
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would not replace
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museums
.
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with, the way
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knowledge
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is provided to the visitors in a museum
connot
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can not
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other means. They
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environment
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for the visitor to fully concentrate on the history and culture and escape from other distractors. The
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views of certain
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on display,
for instance
, cannot be recreated on
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online media.
Therefore
,
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should be maintained as they are done despite having
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in technology.
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, it is a building than
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scholars in all areas together to conserve valuable
artificats
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artefacts
which invariably leads to
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knowledge
knowladge
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and views of the past and traditions.
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would lead to
rediscovery
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the rediscovery
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of the past and shed new light on mysteries.
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has inspired many young engineers to
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incorporate
incoporate
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incorporate
those techniques in their current work. Unless they have
physicaly
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physically
visited the museum, they would not have appreciated the wonder of past creations. In conclusion,
Museums
should remain even in
this
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technologically
advanced era, because the platform of education and
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knowledge
knowladge
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knowledge
development could not be replaced by technological advances.
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