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In the past important knowledge of culture and history was stored in the museums. Nowadays information is freely available on the internet therefore is no need of museums. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#culture #history #museums #information #internet
Museums
 are both a
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knowledge
knowladge
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knowledge
 hub that
showcase
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the
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history and culture and
also
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 as a guardian
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the
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historical valuable items. With
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 of information technology, some argue
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museums
 can be completely replaced by
online
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the online
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. In my opinion,
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the museum
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museum
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 would never be replaced by any media since the learning experience and academic discussions it creates cannot be done over the world wide web.
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 would not replace
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museums
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To begin
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knowledge
knowladge
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knowledge
 is provided to the visitors in a museum
connot
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can not
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 other means. They
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environment
environement
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 for the visitor to fully concentrate on the history and culture and escape from other distractors. The
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 views of certain
artifacts
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 on display,
for instance
, cannot be recreated on
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online media.
Therefore
,
these institute
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 should be maintained as they are done despite having
advances
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 in technology.
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Furthermore
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, it is a building than
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scholars in all areas together to conserve valuable
artificats
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artefacts
 which invariably leads to
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knowledge
knowladge
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knowledge
 and views of the past and traditions.
These valuable discussion
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 would lead to
rediscovery
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the rediscovery
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 of the past and shed new light on mysteries.
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, the display of old irrigation
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 has inspired many young engineers to
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incorporate
incoporate
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incorporate
 those techniques in their current work. Unless they have
physicaly
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physically
 visited the museum, they would not have appreciated the wonder of past creations. In conclusion,
Museums
 should remain even in
this
technologicaly
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technologically
 advanced era, because the platform of education and
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knowledge
knowladge
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knowledge
 development could not be replaced by technological advances.
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